The goal of my revision strategy is to rewrite my thesis. After reading my peer and professor review comments I realized my thesis was not as clear as I originally thought. The way I am going to fix this is by going through my essay and finding the main theme of my paper. I first thought I would write my paper about how beauty allows for the freedom of emotions but I thought that was a little confusing so I am glad to have the review comments to help figure out my ideas. Once this theme is found I then will be able to use the ideas of my body paragraphs to support it. My new theme will be along the lines of when we find something beautiful we are given relief from life’s many problems.
The biggest challenge I may face while rewriting my thesis is probably finding outside sources to help support my theme. I know I want to talk about the drives more and relay that back to my thesis but doing it in a clear way may be a challenge. A way to solve this problem is to go back and reread Armstrong’s paper again with an idea of what I want supported so then I can pinpoint a quote that is useful. During class we did an exercise like this and I felt like it really helped so I will use this if a challenge does arise. If I have a problem that is too difficult for me to solve on my own, I have resources like my peer groups, professor and the SASC writing center to go to for help.
I think rereading Armstrong is a wonderful strategy. Keep up the good work!